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35. Acid Burst by ~kheb:iconkheb:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Experimental > Surrealism


Time has taken liberties with you,
held its hand to your throat.
Such gleaming eyes,
passion or poison,
impossible to see inside a rolling
crystal ball.
Falling through the flaming clouds,
sweet taste of dust and deliverance.
Eyeshocked,
you push back,
invaded by the burst of reality,
such delicious horror—
spinning in every dimension,
seeing the colors you thought were rubbed out,
rolling through the stars streaked into spun sugar.
But this brilliant pollution does not have the prior claim.
Time will take you back from the abyss,
set shackles on you,
brand you with kiss upon kiss,
as if you never fled.
©2008-2009 ~kheb
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Author's Comments

*100ThemesChallenge
Variation - Mine
35. Acid Burst

For the 48 Hours contest by *Acid-Burst-Love-Fed.

Took about six minutes to write, once I recognized the images in my mind.

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for Leoben and Kara

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*Spectrumchaser Sep 17, 2008, 1:00:51 PM
Wow! I love the images in this...it's very psychedelic. :eyepopping: The phrases "sweet taste of dust and deliverance" and "this brilliant pollution does not have the prior claim" really are striking. I like the way you used "time" in the beginning and again in the end tying things up very nicely. Pretty awesome poem for only a few minutes of work...but sometimes the good ones just come out that way!! :D

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Hey --- that's MY box of crayons!!
*Writers-Club
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~kheb Sep 17, 2008, 5:19:45 PM
Exactly, sometimes they just leap out, Athenian style. I love it when that happens, though it makes me feel a bit less responsible for their genius. Although I've always liked the idea of Time personified; this is a sufficiently wildly non-traditional context to please me. :d
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*Spectrumchaser Sep 18, 2008, 4:53:06 AM
Athenian leaping genius....hmmm..sounds like another poem to me! :D

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Hey --- that's MY box of crayons!!
*Writers-Club
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*Bright-Circle Sep 18, 2008, 9:20:13 AM
This is awesome.

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Medusa was beautiful
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~kheb Sep 18, 2008, 12:04:19 PM
That's the one I wanted you to see.
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*Bright-Circle Sep 18, 2008, 2:38:39 PM
Good.

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Medusa was beautiful
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~fortress-of-tears13 Oct 4, 2008, 12:32:24 PM
It's very beautifully written, love the words you used to describe things :)

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:bulletpurple: I have an idea.
Here take this knife.
Cut out your heart.
Now place your heart into my hand.
*Stabs the heart a million times*
There now. Better? :bulletpurple:
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~kheb Oct 4, 2008, 6:34:40 PM
Thank you! :love: I really appreciate the feedback.
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~fortress-of-tears13 Oct 4, 2008, 6:43:21 PM
You're welcome hun :) :heart:

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:bulletpurple: I have an idea.
Here take this knife.
Cut out your heart.
Now place your heart into my hand.
*Stabs the heart a million times*
There now. Better? :bulletpurple:
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