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I remember understanding,
the explosion of peace as they fell
once and again
in an orchestration of carnage.  
I can tell tales
of when that fever fades,
when the burning deathdust
rides out of the lungs,
when the soldiers stir
and realize that their puzzle-piece hearts
can't fit anymore into their mothballed lives.  
I myself understand all too well,
lasting as flotsam on an empty sea,
wishing a return to the sincere destruction
that marks a simple life.
©2008-2009 ~kheb
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:iconpereubuisjesus:
I really like this one. Its less cryptic than some of your other work. I'm a very literal person and I find it hard to get my head around things. But thats okay. You write this for yourself not for me. I understand that a lot of your stuff is painting with words. One thing I always love is little phrases that grab my attention and stick in my head. Surprisingly, Explosions of peace stuck in my head. Kindve a simple irony, but it just seemed to click. Another thing I really like about your gallery is the varying lengths of your writings. Its very refreshing to me.

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See you space cowboy...
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It's true, I write for myself--but on the other hand, it's my hope that these poems have a more objective worth. So I'm happy to hear that this one clicks for you. I do tend to be very oblique and "painterly"...at times it can be kind of a crutch...but I think this one strikes a nice balance.

It's great to hear your feedback, especially when it's so well expressed. Thank you.

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